Ahaha, heres the paper I wrote on global warming, it's only a rought draft. Hope you enjoy.

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Very intreseting read, one minor issue with one page going to the next smoothly, but I am sure you saw that (Rough draft you said)

I would give it a A- as is!

I sent it to a friend and he liked it too!

Yawn...You want a real interesting paper? Take an issue you feel strongly against, then take the point of view opposite of what you believe! I wrote a solid gold paper on why public smoking should not be banned yet I'd rather not inhale smoke wherever I go.


Global warming, is an issue that I really hate. I hate it for the fact that the true experts on the subject are rarely those reporting upon it. Climatologist themselves are split on this issue, while people who are experts in other fields and those that are experts in no fields *cough*Al Gore *cough* speak as if they were the foremost expert. The crux of the arguement against global warming is that the human variable is inseperable from the "natural constant" of temperature. (I say "natural constant" of temperature because global temperature is constantly in flux)

i would think it deserves atleast a 4 on the 6 number grading scale

Freedom to speak freely sir?

I also read this paper, and must admit to my jaded opinion of global warming. Michael Crighton examines this subject in detail in the book "State of Fear", and although a work of fiction, raises a lot of valid points. The fact that scientists are funded by grants lends weight to his argument that if no "crisis" exists, the funding ceases, so one might be created that is very hard to either prove or disprove, except by the scientists themselves. This leaves the only "evidence" of global warming in the hands of those that benefit monetarily from the marketing of the idea. Just something to think about.

Be that as it may, I am a bit sickened by the abuse of companies marketing products based upon "environmentalism", especially those that try to make me feel guilty if I choose any other product. These companies use public pressure and theoretically unproven phenomena to push what are often inferior products to an unsuspecting public...at great profit. Take for example the Evercool EGF-12 "Evergreen" case fan. Evercool claims:

Quote: Ever Green Fans are compatible with the standard for European Union’s ROHS. There are no artificial metallic elements involved in the processing for these fans. Therefore it will not pollute our environment

OK, so they went to lead-free solder as the law requires them to. Oh, wait..if you read into the ROHS, there have been amendments and exemptions made for many products containing lead, hinting that political lobbying pressure has as much to do with ROHS as pure science or actual concern for the environment would. So when does not manufacturing with known hazardous materials to keep your ass out of jail equate to "environmentalism", especially for a non-biodegradeable plastic computer fan? What about the fan's performance and efficiency? Evercool doesn't list any CFM ratings or specs to back up how power efficient their product is, which would be a much more direct "environmental" impact, saving on the amount of power to get a certain amount of air to flow. Lacking the ability to prove scientifically the minimal impact of this product, Evercool justifies their claims with this:

Quote: Green casing providing a pure and fresh feeling

Oh, great...I feel pure and fresh. I think I'll go eat some granola and hug a tree.

Specifically regarding your paper: There's a lot of typos and grammar mistakes. Considering it's for an English class and not Science, I'd spend some time cleaning it up, subject matter or validity of debate aside.

Quote: Originally Posted by Wordbiker Freedom to speak freely sir? I also read this paper, and must admit to my jaded opinion of global warming. Michael Crighton examines this subject in detail in the book "State of Fear", and although a work of fiction, raises a lot of valid points. The fact that scientists are funded by grants lends weight to his argument that if no "crisis" exists, the funding ceases, so one might be created that is very hard to either prove or disprove, except by the scientists themselves. This leaves the only "evidence" of global warming in the hands of those that benefit monetarily from the marketing of the idea. Just something to think about. Be that as it may, I am a bit sickened by the abuse of companies marketing products based upon "environmentalism", especially those that try to make me feel guilty if I choose any other product. These companies use public pressure and theoretically unproven phenomena to push what are often inferior products to an unsuspecting public...at great profit. Take for example the Evercool EGF-12 "Evergreen" case fan. Evercool claims: OK, so they went to lead-free solder as the law requires them to. Oh, wait..if you read into the ROHS, there have been amendments and exemptions made for many products containing lead, hinting that political lobbying pressure has as much to do with ROHS as pure science or actual concern for the environment would. So when does not manufacturing with known hazardous materials to keep your ass out of jail equate to "environmentalism", especially for a non-biodegradeable plastic computer fan? What about the fan's performance and efficiency? Evercool doesn't list any CFM ratings or specs to back up how power efficient their product is, which would be a much more direct "environmental" impact, saving on the amount of power to get a certain amount of air to flow. Lacking the ability to prove scientifically the minimal impact of this product, Evercool justifies their claims with this: Oh, great...I feel pure and fresh. I think I'll go eat some granola and hug a tree. Specifically regarding your paper: There's a lot of typos and grammar mistakes. Considering it's for an English class and not Science, I'd spend some time cleaning it up, subject matter or validity of debate aside.

Nice to see another skeptic! But as far as RoHS, isn't that less about envirementalism, and more about the "let's put less toxic stuff in computers since we know all of the ancient useless ones are in trash heaps in India where children play and get mercury poisioning" ?

Quote: Originally Posted by Gzim Nice to see another skeptic! But as far as RoHS, isn't that less about envirementalism, and more about the "let's put less toxic stuff in computers since we know all of the ancient useless ones are in trash heaps in India where children play and get mercury poisioning" ?

Exactly. It's like marketing Halloween candy with the tagline: "Now with fewer glass splinters!" It'll still rot your teeth though.

Have you proofread this yet? There's a lot of errors, and a whole lot more commas than are needed

Your thesis is boring. It doesnt Jump out at me and say HEY READ ME I AM INTRESTING.

Quote: Today, hurricane Adam struck Florida with category 5 winds.

I say big deal. Give me something I havent seen before, in fact, something amazing! Spice it up a bit.

Heres a tip, have someone else read your essay and make changes to it (perfrably, someone who has the same amount of education as you) OR go do something for a hour or 2 to get your mind off of the essay, then go back and read it.

Quote: Damages are estimates to cost 250 billion dollars, and the hurricane season has only just begun. In other news, New York is facing record temperatures for the third consecutive week in a row with the heat index reaching 105 degrees Fahrenheit. 3000 have already died in the heat wave, and power outages are expected to increase as people continue to crank up their AC to try and stifle the heat. Britain faces more rain today, with rain fall already exceeding 20 inches in some places, flooding has become widespread.

tell me, Is this a fact or is it your opinion? Can you back this up with sources?

Quote: Emergency Services have postponed all operations until further notice. Looting and panic are rifling through the country as power, and communication systems start failing with Emergency Services suspended.

Same with this.

Skimming through the document, I see NO sources of where you got this info. You MUST use MLA or APA format for sources, or else you will get in trouble for plagiarizing. Unless of course, you have a seperate page, but I should still see some kind of format integrated into that paragraph. Also, use quotations.

Sorry dude, this is as far as Im going. Ive only gotten up to the 1st paragraph and there are a number of things that are wrong.

Gzim-

I will try that point of view for my next paper.

Wordbiker -

Your comments are irrevelant to this paper becuase this deals with global warming, and greenhouse gases, not hazardous material. However, I do see you point and it is noted.

SexyPants -

Its a rough draft.

Nerdz -

It's called telling a story, some papers use it to break the ice, and get the reader in a good mood, then bam, thesis statement.

Well, I took this to my English class, and it has been peer reviewed. I do realize that it is lacking directly/indirectly stated thesis, and the points made aren't very good. This is just one of many drafts this week before i turn it in next tuesday.

Quote: Originally Posted by The Captain Gzim- I will try that point of view for my next paper. Wordbiker - Your comments are irrevelant to this paper becuase this deals with global warming, and greenhouse gases, not hazardous material. However, I do see you point and it is noted. SexyPants - Its a rough draft. Nerdz - It's called telling a story, some papers use it to break the ice, and get the reader in a good mood, then bam, thesis statement. Well, I took this to my English class, and it has been peer reviewed. I do realize that it is lacking directly/indirectly stated thesis, and the points made aren't very good. This is just one of many drafts this week before i turn it in next tuesday.

Yes, it could be missleading though. You can still have it, but signify that its fake, in the next paragraph or so then go onto the actual facts.

But still, where did you get those graphs and the data? But you did say this is a draft, So you might have not put those in yet.

Quote: Originally Posted by Nerdz But still, where did you get those graphs and the data? But you did say this is a draft, So you might have not put those in yet.

I will post the paper with citations once I begin editing tomorrow. I went and found some more interesting sites depicting both side of the issues so I may rewrite some parts of the paper. This paper actually doesn't have to be cited, but I'm doing it anyway, makes me feel all warm and fuzzy inside.

I'm currently reading a 31 page report on Global warming. I think I've highlighted at least one thing on every page that I could use, ahahahahah.

The Earth has been affected by Global Warming and Cooling for
millions of years. Without human help. Things alway seem to
work themselves out. The big problem with all these "so called"
experts is that they can't actually tell us about the past. How can
they actually predict the future. All they have is speculation.
While I personnally think the whole issue is a waste of time,
I'll give you an A on your paper. For effort.

I know. The experts aren't able to tell yet if humans have "affected" the climate. Maybe in a couple hundred years we can tell, but it's still to early. Once I finish rewriting my paper, it will be more clear on my view of this matter. I will post it once I finish it. Now back to highlighting and reading.

Well see, they also recently found methane gas in the ocean (most notably, the hudson valley). They are saying that it could cause a climate change (Methane Hydroxides have a halflife of about 27 years or so, you can look this up.) Strange thing is, Now (where I live) Its cold for this time of the year. We were in mid august, and already it was in the 50s Usually Its still in the 90s! I think its going to be very cold with a lot of snow in the north.

The sad thing is, the paper is supposed to be 750 - 800 words long. However, it's looking like it will be well over 2000 words. Man, my english teacher is gonna flip s@#$. I just gotta make sure I make it transition smoothly, and remind the reader what their reading about.

Ok, here it is, I just finished it. It's 1,509 words, and I had left out 3 topics so I could shorten the paper so my teacher wouldn't yell at me so much.

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