This is my first attempt at a satirical/comical article Feedback would be appreciated

I'm hoping this gets published in my school's paper, "Malestrom"

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Ever eat a bag of Funyun potato chips with grace? I sure haven't.


Funyuns a sort of odd composure about them, they aren't like any other potato chip, if you want to call them potato chips. They've got that distinct crunch, more distinct than the average potato chip-- theres definatly a sort of 'ring' to the crunch of a Funyun, is almost indescribeable. Speaking of rings, that too, sets a Funyun aside from other chips, they're ring shaped, not circular-ish and flat. Strange huh?


So, back to the question of "Have you ever eaten one of these funky 'potato chips' with elegance"?


You may have tried, but definitely failed. You'll notice, that no matter how you bite into a Funyun it always crumbles like a 15 year old under peer pressure (smoke 'dat kronic!). A Gentle Bites... it shatters, though slowly.. Furious quick bites... it explodes, potentially blinding anybody in the vicinity! Even attempting to break it apart with your fingers gently will shoot a crumb into an oncoming bystandard. And there have been plenty futile attempts of trying to catch crumbs in your mouth (making you look rather ridiculous) is a feat that even Kobayashi couldn't accomplish.


So what is the proper way to eat a Funyun you ask? Simple. Shove the entire thing into your mouth. Thats right. Whole thing. In mouth. Crunch! Clean & Simple. Maybe you'll look like a pig, maybe you'll look like you're high class, but really. its just the way to eat a funnion.


Oh, wait- no it isn't. Cause it can't be done!

Guess you'll never eat a Funyun quiet or ellegantly.

Sucks to be you.

P.S. Don't try eating it with utensils, you'll just fail miserably.

good start... but you have failed to realise a key point...

Funyuns are not potato chips, rather they are a corn based snack... more like a frito.

But theyre catagoriezed with Potato chips, just like fritos.

I love to just smash the whole bag and sprinkle on soup, adds texture and a unique flavor.

"Chips" its just a label every one accepts. There is a break down but who really cares. You go to the "Chips" isle and pick out what you want.

Now Master Yunk, you left the write up wide open for people to think about allot of things. The mess, the flavor, the texture and composure while eating them, nice combo. Good job, I like it.

I'm off to buy some Funions...

Give it another read over, you've got a few spelling and grammar mistakes.

Also, I know who Kobayashi is, but I don't know if it's safe to assume others do